what the...
welllllll where to start. It had really no sense of direction, and no flow. It seems you just plugged in a bunch of random notes and called it a day. This "song" lacks "fullness" and a beat that can lead it along.
The beat itself is basic and becomes diverse at random times, and it almost makes no sense.
The "melody" is where i really got confused. It didn't have any musical structure whatsoever to it (at least that i could tell) and it really seemed like it was just random notes. Put in some strings, make the song flow, and try again.
Overall i'd have to say this wont make the cut. It's not even trance. If anything i'd put it under techno. I hope i wasn't too critical in this review, but im only trying to help you improve and create better songs. Don't take this all the wrong way. We all have to start somewhere. Just keep on trying, and through reviews and more experience, you will improve.
Hope this helped, and feel free to check out my music. Keep trying! Oh and what program are you using? Fl studio? Reason? Other?
DJ Zeeber